Thursday, July 20, 2017

blue summer



the morning sky shimmers, powder
blue, light as flour -
scattered snow clouds
train of lace crowns -

pear trees are breezing open, flutes
ringing with fruits
green, small as thumbs
soon, sweet on tongues

daffodils and white asters sway
peach blossoms splay
summer calls, blurs-
you are not here




Photo credit:  here


Posted for dVerse poets Pub - Form for All, hosted by Frank Hubeny.  Please drop by to learn more about the minute form, starting at 3pm EST. The form requires three stanzas of 20 syllables each. Each stanza has four lines. The first line has 8 syllables and the next three lines have 4 syllables each. If that is not enough constraints, the poem is expected to have end rhymes for the three stanzas that go aabb ccdd eeff.  More information on the dVerse site.

29 comments:

  1. Got in some rhyme as summer is sublime. Everything opening up.

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  2. This is so beautiful! I can't even pick a favorite phrase; it's all so compelling.

    You are truly a gifted poet, Grace. Thank you for always lifting my spirits with your skill.

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  3. A description of what is there except the "you" at the end. Nice minute poem, Grace!

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  4. I admire how you got a serious poem out of this form, Grace, with run ons to boot!

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  5. Your minute poem was so calming and uplifting, Grace, with its powder blue morning sky, 'light as flour', the pear trees 'breezing open' and splaying peach blossom, and then I came face to face with the sad-blue twist at the end.

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  6. Gorgeous, the whole thing and especially the middle stanza with the pears like thumbs. Nice choices in rhyme which allowed the rhymes to take a back seat to the creative imagery.

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  7. Oh, run ons. My dream. Lovely poem, flows beautifully, not as tum ti tum as many minute poems end up being. It's gorgeous.

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  8. Flawless. like feathers floating gently on a summer breeze.XX

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  9. Once again you imagery shines. You are starting to rival Mary Oliver, Grace.

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  10. Oh your train of lace clouds, Grace!

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  11. Thanks for taking us away to somewhere so green and flowery

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  12. No amount of wonder can cover this truth. Well crafted.

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  13. Thanks Grace, I really like your pear trees. <3

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  14. Lovely poem grace...

    peace and love
    1ManView

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  15. Amazing. You turned the frivolous form around like playing a concerto with a banjo.

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  16. You managed a minute poem that made sense and was filled with lovely phrases. I bow to your talent!

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  17. Love the growing fruit. We saw tiny red pears on three trees in a front yard on our neighborhood walk with the dog the other night. Summer growth is glorious and captured well in this poem.

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  18. train of lace crowns is such a lovely visual.

    Blue summer is keenly felt with a loved one's absence.

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  19. You had me, yes, at /train of lace crowns/--rocking the prompt, with nice twist ending--like Jewish curses--"may you have great success, own a mansion with 100 rooms--and may you be sick in every one of them !"

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  20. A sweet poem that captures summer.

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  21. There are nature's blessing missed in summer

    Hank

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  22. You've mastered this form... as I'm not even noticing the form within your beautiful words. LOVE the ending! And most especially these words:
    "Scattered snow clouds
    Train of lace crowns"

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  23. Ah, I was so enjoying your summer day description until the end when I was like punched in the gut. What a twist. :-)

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  24. such beautiful words to go with beautiful colors! As always, thank you.

    Hope you’re having a great summer and don’t forget you can find me at:
    Elsie

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  25. Ah, the words are beautiful and poetic. And I love the photo.

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